高中英语满分作文：给房东留言（附点评）

【试题回放】假定你是李华，正在英国接受英语培训，住在一户英国人家里。今天你的房东Mrs. Wilson 不在家，你准备外出，请给Mrs. Wilson 写一留言条，内容包括：

　　1.外出购物

　　2.替房东还书

　　3.Tracy 来电话留言：1)咖啡屋(Bolton Coffee)见面取消

　　2)此事已告知Susan

　　3) 尽快回电

　　注意：1. 词数100左右;

　　2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

　　Mrs. Wilson,

　　I’m going out shopping, and won’t be back until about 5:00 pm. I have taken with me the two books you asked me to return to the City Library. At about 1 o’clock this afternoon, Tracy called, saying that she couldn’t meet you at Bolton Coffee tomorrow morning as she has something important to attend to. She felt very sorry about that, but said that you could set some other time for the meeting. She wanted you to call her back as soon as you are home. She has already told Susan about this change.

　　Yours,

　　Li Hua

　　[点评]

　　本文属于提纲式要点作文，是学生比较熟悉的题材，体现了英语学习应该注意臻选性，生活型的原则。行文人称、时态运用恰当、准确，各个要点间逻辑连贯，行文通顺。提纲类书面表达不是简单的逐条翻译，而是将所给的几个要点合理的组成比较通顺的语句，因此要仔细组织语言，合理安排结构。在语言方面，要特别注意简洁明了，开头要开门见山。